Monday, March 19, 2012

Show Not Tell - Hydroslide

As I looked down from the tower of fun I saw the ground was at least a mile away. I waited patiently for my turn. It finally came. As the light stayed on red I waited for it to change to green, it did. Swissh went the water as I skimmed down through the monstrous slide, as dark as the night. ‘SPLASH’ I came out of the monster and I crashed into more water. It was like I went in one way and came out the other.
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3 comments:

  1. AmosHMarch 20, 2012 at 9:34 AM

    Kiora Cruz,that was a very cool and interesting story about show not tell-Hydro slide story I would like to see a lot more of your good work so I could be able to read them.:) keep up the awesome writing. Amos

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  2. Kayde IMarch 27, 2012 at 10:50 AM

    Kia Ora Cruz.....

    That was such a great piece of writing I read! I wish to read more. Keep up the good work!

    From kayde

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  3. LepaApril 30, 2012 at 9:36 AM

    Hello Cruz,

    You really got me thinking like our chess game. Show not tell . Very interesting words, I really liked the word "skimmed". You used that word very well.

    Well keep up your superb work. (:

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